Please help me edit and re-write my essay
This is the feedback I got from my professor :
You have some good ideas here! My comments for improvement are the following:
One big issue is that you seem to be contradicting your argument throughout the paper. You begin by saying that the US should move toward universal healthcare. But then, a few paragraphs later, you say it’s not a good. Instead of showing the pros and cons, you must pick a side and stick with it. You can certainly bring up oppositional viewpoints in the paper (counterarguments), but then you must refute them.
Also, don’t forget to include smooth transitions from one major paragraph to the next.
Can you add some more data/numbers/statistics to your argument (in the body paragraphs) to better support your claims? Data is needed in many of your body paragraphs.
Carefully proofread and correctly format the paper, and then, you’re good to go! You are close. Keep working.
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